My editor's comments

I recently met with my editor, Stacy. She's not a profressional editor, but has a lot of writing experience, and more importantly was willing to read the entire manusrcipt. She asked me if I wanted her feedback straight or with a little sugar. Give it to me straight, I say. If this book is going to be ANYTHING, I need honest feedback from every corner.

Overall Stacy said the story is worthwhile and I should pursue publishing (I plan to), but I need to put in a lot of work before that time. The text needs a good amount of technical editing, as the wording is distracting in places now. Part of the story is set in a future world, and Stacy doesn't buy some of the situations and technologies there. She also made good recomendations to set up the story and pull the reader into the world.

Stacy also picked up on my lack of outline and subsequent attempts to change the plot. I had attempted a post-written sort of outline, but clearly it did not help me enough. I plan on during my next draft to write an outline as I go through the edit of the work - hopefully this will help me to keep everything straight in my mind, so that I will be able to keep the story straight for the reader.